During summer vacation④

Can you believe that junior high school students get higher scores for the test if they study hard only for 5 days? My answer is “Yes”, because I actually experienced during this summer vacation.

I am a member of Non Profit Organization called “Teach For Japan”. This organization is founded to eliminate education gaps in Japan. I work for this organization as a student’s staff and I have a lot of tasks: to recruit other university students as a teacher, and to help them to prepare for the classes. If university students are employed, they will teach for a few days some junior high school students who are not good at studying or are slow-learners in our internship.

One day, I went to Nara Prefecture, because that day was the first day of the summer internship of my NPO. I found to my regret the students in class not very much motivated in studying. The teachers did their best. For example, they prepared for the class all night even though the students had bad attitude about studying. Finally, the students could got good scores on the test on the last day of the summer program. Everyone, of course including myself was so glad to see this happen.

This experience is the most memorable incident during my summer vacation.

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During summer vacation④ への8件のフィードバック

  1. advcomp より:

    > Can you believe that junior high school students get higher scores for the test if they study hard only for 5 days?
    OK
    > My answer is “Yes”, because I actually experienced during this summer vacation.
    OK
    saw that happen
    witnessed that happen
    that
    vs.
    a miracle?
    a scene
    > I am a member of Non Profit Organization called “Teach For Japan”.
    use of period with quotes

  2. advcomp より:

    > I am a member of Non Profit Organization called “Teach For Japan”.
    use of period with quotes

    http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/marks/quotation.htm

  3. advcomp より:

    > This organization is founded to eliminate education gaps in Japan.
    is founded
    vs.
    was founded

    > I work for this organization as a student’s staff and I have a lot of tasks: to recruit other university students as a teacher, and to help them to prepare for the classes.
    I am a student staff at this organization
    vs.
    I work for

    which is better

    I pefere ‘work for’, but … .

  4. advcomp より:

    > If university students are employed, they will teach for a few days some junior high school students who are not good at studying or are slow-learners in our internship.
    We emply university students to teach xxxxx
    to help xxxx to learn
    to help xxxx to review
    > One day, I went to Nara Prefecture, because that day was the first day of the summer internship of my NPO.
    Have you mentioned where NPO is located?
    > I found to my regret the students in class not very much motivated in studying.
    found Nouns Adj –> OK
    but when you have an inserted phrase: to my regret — readability goes down
    I dound to my regret that the students in the class were not very much motivated in studying

    • advcomp より:

      > I dound to my regret that the students in the class were not very much motivated in studying
      Sorry, I had a typo in my own comment

      I found to my regret that the students in the class were not very much motivated in studying

  5. advcomp より:

    > The teachers did their best.
    were doing their best
    vs.
    did their best

    Which one is better?

    be +ing
    > For example, they prepared for the class all night even though the students had bad attitude about studying.
    bad
    vs.
    unfavorable
    vs.
    ill ( not good here!)
    vs.
    unhealthy (not good here, either)

    bad, unfriendly, unfavorable

    use of Thesaurus

  6. advcomp より:

    > Finally, the students could got good scores on the test on the last day of the summer program.
    Logical gap
    Fianally

    Thanks to the teachers. as well as students efforts, finnally the students in this class got good scores

    > Everyone, of course including myself was so glad to see this happen.
    OK
    > This experience is the most memorable incident during my summer vacation.
    is
    vs.
    was

    either is OK!?

  7. advcomp より:

    It is getting much better and more readable. keep up with a good work!

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