pros&cons

These days, many young people use social media to get along with their friends.  However, some researchers find there are a couple of problems to use social media.  Let me explain the problems.

I sense the underdevelopment of media literacy, so we must nurture media literacy in children.  Everyone, including me sometimes misunderstands or doesn’t know that the information is true actually.   We can get a lot of information on the Internet, especially common in social media.  In other words, the false information spreads across the globe also.  Be careful to surf the Internet and to get new information.  You should check if the information is true or not.

We must get a grip on ourselves, because some people use social media too much and waste a lot of time.  They who use social media too much tend to get bad scores in the tests.

We should take the time to communicate with our friends in real life.  If you spend a lot of time to communicate with your friends on the internet and don’t communicate in real life, it may lead relationship problem.  Face-to-face communication is the most important thing to get along with our friends.

More and more people use a lot of social media to communicate each other.  However, we must be careful about the way how to use one.

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  1. advcomp より:

    > These days, many young people use social media to get along with their friends.
    to communicate
    > However, some researchers find there are a couple of problems to use social media.
    in using
    vs.
    to use

    such social media
    > Let me explain the problems.
    OK

  2. advcomp より:

    > I sense the underdevelopment of media literacy, so we must nurture media literacy in children.
    whose underdevelopmet
    the tool itself
    media literacy –> not the tool, but a person??

    I fear
    I sense

    I fear that users in general have lower ??
    users in public has a room to enrich media literacy??

  3. advcomp より:

    > Everyone, including me sometimes misunderstands or doesn’t know that the information is true actually.
    me
    vs.
    myself

    know
    vs.
    tell

    whether
    vs.
    that

  4. advcomp より:

    > We can get a lot of information on the Internet, especially common in social media.
    including the false ones
    especially common in social media. -> wakarimaseen

  5. advcomp より:

    > In other words, the false information spreads across the globe also.
    can spread
    spread easily

    logic of also is awkward
    > Be careful to surf the Internet and to get new information.
    use of ‘infinitive ‘to surf –> wrong?
    in surficing

    to get??

    Be careful in surging the Internet to get new information’
    > You should check if the information is true or not.
    should always be alert and check
    > We must get a grip on ourselves, because some people use social media too much and waste a lot of time.
    logical flow is not coherent here?
    information — correct or not

    habitual
    addicted

    what is the relationship between this and the media literacy

  6. advcomp より:

    > They who use social media too much tend to get bad scores in the tests.
    media literarcy
    vs.
    personal achievemet

    Are you discussing two or three issues?

    You are discussing the problems or pitfalls of social media, right?
    ——————
    Social media not only have internal problems but also cause/ invite/ elicit a few problems on the part of the users, especially the youth.

    1) room for higher media literarcy
    2) to easyly fall in addiction
    3) to weaken personal communication
    4) lower academic acheivement
    ——————

  7. advcomp より:

    > We should take the time to communicate with our friends in real life.
    You would definitely change the paragraph as the logical flow is different from the above disucssion of media literacy.

    > If you spend a lot of time to communicate with your friends on the internet and don’t communicate in real life, it may lead relationship problem.
    If you reply on the internet to communicated with your friends, rather than a face to face personal communication in daily life, you might fall into xxxxx
    > Face-to-face communication is the most important thing to get along with our friends.
    is essential
    >
    > More and more people use a lot of social media to communicate each other.
    communicate
    vs.
    communicate with

    each other -> usuage is a pronoun like he/him/ she/her/ they/them
    > However, we must be careful about the way how to use one.
    logic of HOWEVER is awkward here!

  8. advcomp より:

    The balance of the paragraphs!!
    The third paragraph above lacks elaboration and therefore too short?
    Or is it a transitional paragraph to link the second and the fourth paragraphs?

    > We must get a grip on ourselves, because some people use social media too much and waste a lot of time. They who use social media too much tend to get bad scores in the tests.

    After all, what is the topic of your discussion?
    It might be better now to form the outline and the addition of topic sentences in each paragraph???

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